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Meme:
Hi!

I'm Meme, and i Played like 15 Adventures with this game, in 5 days! :O
Each Adventure was in a different Location, and so i tried all of them.

Well, i like this game a lot, and so i made(with the help of some friends) some settings for it.

Settings:
The Primal Pool, where gods are Forged / The Hydra's Den, in which ravines legendary creatures tread / The Submerged City, its people sleeping in the deep / The Western Seas, in which every island holds a threat and a treasure / The Limbo, where the Nowhere fills everything / The Syrial Waterfalls, flowing with a moan / The Magnificent Alexandria, clean and wondrous on the outside, foul within / The City of Machines, where math rules/ The Dark Forest of Oblivion / The Platinum Spire, house of the last Warlock / The 3000 Years-long Warfront, where two peoplehave been fighting each other for Aeons / The Shadow Temple, in which obscure adepts study the lost arts / The Fallen Devil, whose dormant body forms a valley.

I thought that they could be interesting for you, am i right? :D

I hope that you can enjoy them with this awesome game!

And, Ron... Do you think that they can work? I will like to read your answer ^^

Ah, and as always, sorry for my terrible english, i'm italian ^^

Read you soon!
Meme

P.S.: We are making some characters too, stay tuned! ^^

Ron Edwards:
Hello,

Wow. I am not sure really what to say, except thank you!

At first glance, half or more of your location descriptions don't add enough to the location name. For example, the title and phrase for the Hydra's Den are saying the same thing. The Limbo could also probably use a different description, perhaps, "Limbo, where no one may exist" or something equally philosophically-bent. The Western Seas don't add anything that we don't already know from the basic game rules.

As I see it, The Primal Pool, The Submerged City, The Syrial Waterfalls, The Magnificent Alexandria (although I'd change the name to something ahistorical), The City of Machines, and The Fallen Devil are all ready for play. For the others, I'd change the phrases either to a key visual element or to an inhabitant or event which is not obvious from the name itself.

Best, Ron

Meme:
Yay!

Thanks for the answer, Ron, is so much useful!

Ok, understood. I will try to change something shortly.

Thanks a lot!

Read you soon!
Meme

Meme:
Ok, let's see. We tried to change something, I hope that this is better ^^

The Western Seas, as clear and dangerous as the eyes of a beautiful woman / The Hydra's Den, among which ravines legends tread / The Limbo, where nobody may live / The Syrial Waterfalls, flowing with a moan / The Magnificent City of Genotha, clean and wondrous on the outside but foul within / The City of Machines, where math rules/ The Dark Forest of Oblivion, where the fairies dwell / The Platinum Spire, house and grave of the last Warlock / The 3000 Years-long Warfront, its soil soaked with blood / The Shadow Temple, in which obscure adepts study the lost arts and virgins die in sacrifices / The Fallen Devil, whose dormant body forms a valley.

Better? :D

Read you soon!
Meme

Ron Edwards:
Oooh, almost perfect! Here's the single change I'd suggest:

The Shadow Temple, in which virgins study the lost arts and obscure adepts die in sacrifices

Best, Ron

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