Started by Meme, May 18, 2010, 02:17:37 PM
QuoteThe Mirror Lake, where persons forget their sorrows ∫ Under the Unending Rains ∫ The Dancing Hall, where it seems everybody is enjoying themselves ∫ The Outer Zone, where a girl is lost
QuoteThe Crystal Mask, where nothing is as it looks like ∫ The Stone Forest, whose inhabitant disregard each other
QuoteThe Sun Court, after the Slaying of the Queen ∫ The Moon Court, waiting for his King ∫ The Eclipse Court, mourning his Prince
Quote from: Ron Edwards on May 27, 2010, 10:47:37 AMThese aren't bad, although I think that the first should be renamed (there's already a Crystal Court) and the second's qualifying phrase might be better re-written, perhaps, "where everyone is alone."
QuoteThe Memory Dome, in which Halls all is retained, and all is forgot - a bit too abstractly philosophical, I think. I can see how it could be made strong, but also how it could easily slip into nothingness
QuoteThe Green Planet, whose King was overthrown ∫ The Green Lands, where the Sun shine over an impending threat (next location!) - first, the Green and Green present the same redundancy as the Court phrases, and second, I don't think that any location should have any link to another location - it becomes a preliminary encounter rather than an adventure of its own
Quote from: Mauro on May 29, 2010, 04:32:04 AMQuoteThe Memory Dome, in which Halls all is retained, and all is forgot - a bit too abstractly philosophical, I think. I can see how it could be made strong, but also how it could easily slip into nothingnessAny idea about how put that strong in the wording? If not, I'll discard it until something better comes in mind to me.